Black-Hawks and Bourbon

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Monday Finish the Story with this picture, and using first sentence…

“Silently as the people watched, the black hawk helicopter lifted into the air.”

Kurt frowned. “Does that mean the helicopter is silent, or the people are silent? And shouldn’t ‘black hawk’ be hyphenated?”

Sara sighed. Why had she ever gotten her degree in English? Why hadn’t she followed her mother’s advice and studied anything healthcare related? She needed a whiskey. Neat.

“What a cool screenplay, though,” her co-worker continued. “Except for all the mistakes.”

Sara turned her burning eyes on Kurt—was he for real?

“I can just see that silent black-hawk (with a hyphen) rising up. And all the silent people, too.”

She threw down her red pen. “I’ll just let you finish up here, then. I’ve got a date with either Jim, Jack, or maybe a Bulleit.”

Kurt’s eyes widened.

“It’s bourbon.”

“Right.” He fiddled with his pen. “Can I come?”

Sara looked at him, from his hipster beard to his skinny jeans and Converse, and shrugged.

“Why not? Maybe we can dangle modifiers together.”


See what happens next in the exciting life and times of Sara and Kurt at Jeeps and Jerks, Part II.

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19 thoughts on “Black-Hawks and Bourbon

  1. Great piece. Please save yoursef from health care related careers. I’m a retired RN and although I loved my career, I am left with disabling arthritis from all the years walking and standing in hospital floors. Really enjoyed your take on Kurt. I had one of those too until we divorced. 🙂

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  2. I looked up Black Hawk, Mara, and my source gave it as two words, both capitalized. It could be that Kurt is trying to impress her and get her attenion, just in the wrong way. Poor guy. Good story and well done. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  3. I’m not so sure Kurt is the best one to critique Sara’s work. I’ve had critiques like that where I’m pulling my hair out in short order. Some people’s reading comprehension is…disappointing. Hopefully, he’s better as a drinking buddy. I do enjoy a Bulleit now and then. It’s tasty stuff.

    This made me smile. The characters felt believable to me. You’ve got a smooth writing style. Fun story! 🙂

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  4. Good story! The English major forgot the question mark on “why not?” 🙂 Thanks Mara for taking part. Almost ready to start your book. Finishing up Cindy Sample’s “Dying for a Dude,” a fun read of murder and mayhem that takes place where I live: Placerville, CA. Stay tuned for next week’s challenge! Be well! ^..^

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    • Thanks for catching the missing “?”–I’m always amazed that I can read something seventeen times, and then another pair of eyes catch something that’s right in front of my nose. I attended a writer’s conference once where a speaker talked about authors’ inability to find their own mistakes because of how we read our own work.

      Happy New Year!

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